Grace's Mosaic Moments


Sunday, April 15, 2012

LIMBO MAN - a Thriller


FBI Special Agent Vee Frost does not care for Homeland Security’s list of job qualifications when they ask to borrow her services. “An experienced agent with a proven track record” is good. “Fluent in Russian” hints of an assignment close to her heart. But “Attractive female, under thirty-five” sends up red flags. Obviously, DHS is asking for services above and beyond the call of duty. But a loan to Homeland Security would look great on her resumé, and it sounds as if they really need her . . .

But when Vee agrees to turn on the charm for a mystery man who may hold the clue to something vital to U. S. security, she never anticipates a chase after two nuclear bombs from the old Soviet arsenal that will take her and the amnesiac Russian arms dealer from New York City to Connecticut, Colorado, New Jersey, and Florida, then on to Siberia and Iran. Nor does she expect to unearth a second personality beneath the façade of the tough arms dealer, Sergei Tokarev. A man with an agenda as hidden as the facts in his brain.

No matter how strong the bond Vee and Sergei form as they chase from one danger to the next, it seems doubtful either of them will live long enough for a happy ending.

Author’s Note: LIMBO MAN and ORANGE BLOSSOMS & MAYHEM were written years apart, and yet the two stories, featuring amnesiac heros, were uploaded back to back. My only excuse: with all the current headlines about Iran’s nuclear program, it just seemed the right time for LIMBO MAN to go “live.”

Speaking of going live, I was astounded when Limbo Man was first in line at Smashwords, going live almost instantly, followed by what must be a new record of about five hours for Kindle. After a rocky week, good news was much appreciated!

Coming next: Part 2 of EDIT THE BLASTED BOOK (which I expected to upload today instead of Limbo. Who knew?)

Sunday, April 1, 2012

EDIT THE BLASTED BOOK


A Handbook for Indie Authors - Part 1


This is Part 1 of a series about editing fiction, particularly romantic fiction, including mystery, suspense, paranormal, and futuristic. Although it is intended for indie authors, who very much need to improve the quality of what they’re uploading to the Net, much of it also applies to authors who would like to put their best foot forward when querying an agent or an editor. Do you want to present a manuscript which is going to cost the publisher time and effort to whip into shape, or do you want to present a professional-looking manuscript, which will cost very little time and money to be ready for publication? In today's tight economy, which manuscript will the editor choose?

A no-brainer, right?

Below is an introduction to the scary world of what it takes to make a manuscript ready for publication.


Editing vs. Copy Editing.

Many authors are not aware of the difference between editing and copy editing. I’ll try to make it clear.

Editing is done by a person who has worked his/her way up in a publishing company, someone who has struggled long and hard to have “Editor or Associate Editor” beside his/her name. These are the people to whom you or your agent sends your manuscript. These are the people who will decide whether or not your book is published.

Copy edits are usually done by young publishing hopefuls, not long out of college. Frequently, they work at home. They are paid at “piecework” rates to find the nitty-gritty mistakes in your manuscript, from spelling, punctuation, and grammar to continuity (Were Betty’s eyes blue in Ch. 1 and brown in Ch. 6?) and facts (Do you have a bastard inheriting an English title? - an absolute no-no). And, yes, copy editors make beginner mistakes. I’ve seen books where the copy editor inserted a decimal before 9mm, which would require the gun to have the smallest bullets in the history of the world!

You get the message: Editors are highly experienced; they’re paid the relatively big bucks. Copy editing is lower echelon - almost anyone with a good English background, a keen eye, and patience can do it.

Editing. Among the many things an editor must look for are:

1. Does your first page capture a reader’s attention?

2. Same for your first chapter. Does it have enough action, interesting dialogue, colorful details (whether setting, secondary characters or plot) to keep the reader turning the page?

3. Have you introduced both hero and heroine in the amount of time that is appropriate to the genre you’re writing?

4. Have you made your hero and heroine likable? (They can have faults, but can a reader see that these will be remedied? Or is it merely a minor fault that makes your character more interesting?) Are your characters sympathetic? Do they have vulnerabilities? Will your readers root for them, really care about them?

5. Is your writing voice developed enough to appeal to the mass romance market?

6. Did you carefully outline your plot in your synopsis, then leave it there, assuming that the reader now knows everything he/she needs to know? (Which is nothing, as the reader never sees anything but the short blurb on the back of the book (or on screen in an online catalog.)

7. Have you ignored one of your two main characters, vastly favoring the point of view of one over the other? And, consequently, not revealing enough of the ignored character’s thoughts, actions, and motivations?

8. Have you used so many secondary characters in the first few chapters that they completely overshadow your hero and heroine?

9. Conversely, have you created interesting, perhaps even colorful, secondary characters who truly enhance your story and are not simply being used as a “dialogue foil” to present backstory?

10. Did you bring your story to a stop in Chapter 1 by cramming in huge chunks of backstory, tempting your readers to chuck your book at the wall?

11. Or possibly you forgot to include any backstory or identification of your characters at all, making them blank-faced talking heads. After all, you know who they are, why can’t the readers add mind-reading to their skills?

12. Dialogue. Have you incorporated setting, actions, description, and/or introspection (thoughts) into your dialogue? Otherwise, we’re back to talking heads against a blank canvas. Not a pretty sight.

13. Did you write twenty words when ten would say the same thing and be more effective?

14. Do you have enough plot to hold a readers’ attention for the full length of your book? Or are you giving us “diary entries” of daily activities instead of a story that is moving forward at a fast enough pace to satisfy modern readers?

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The items listed above are just some of the things an editor must look for when reading a manuscript. And, more importantly, if the editor thinks your work worth the effort, he/she must then find ways to explain to you what must be fixed before your book is ready for publication. This requires a great deal of skill and experience and is a long, long way from simple copy edits. Yes, misspelled words and bad punctuation jump out at readers and are easy to criticize, but it’s the more serious “edits” that make or break a book. Indie authors must realize this before they simply have someone proofread their manuscript and “certify” that it’s ready for publication. Almost all manuscripts require careful “editing”and not just “copy editing.”

I have a long list of books in my Kindle archives, books by authors I will not read again because their book did not capture my attention. Or books I put aside after ten pages because they were so poorly constructed I couldn't read any farther. But I keep active on my Kindle one of each book by authors I like to remind me to look for that author’s next book.

Be the author whose book is “saved.” Whose next book is eagerly awaited.

And never forget—although good spelling, punctuation, and grammar are important, your book won’t make it without a good story and well-drawn characters.

So do it right . . . make more money.~ * ~

Coming next: Edit your own books or employ a professional?

Thanks for stopping by.

Grace, who writes as Blair Bancroft
& edits as Best Foot Forward (editsbyBFF@aol.com)

Monday, March 26, 2012

Dinosaurs in a Zoo??

Dinosaurs? An explanation can be found below the photo essay.


















































































Spent a marvelous three hours at the Brevard (FL) Zoo Sunday—daughter, son-in-law & three grand-girls— all wishing we'd managed an earlier start. (By the time we got around to feeding the giraffes, they'd headed toward their barn for the night. Sigh.)

But all in all, the Brevard Zoo is an amazing place - no wonder cars were parked almost all the way to the main road. In addition to the usual array of animals, all "outdoors" in green habitats, there was a very special exhibit that will be there only through May 28, 2012. Sixteen life-size robotic dinosaurs ( not counting hatchlings), moving, roaring, a couple even spitting water, and one eating a large fish. Each carefully labeled in large letters, easy for a child to read. Grandchildren and adults alike were ecstatic. Best extra $5 above ticket price we'd ever paid.

Created, obviously at great expense, out of Houston, the dinosaurs are destined for Australia and New Zealand next, so this may be a last chance to see them in the U. S. for some time come. I cannot recommend the exhibit too highly. Above are a few highlights of our afternoon at the zoo. Believe me, those dinosaurs had all the adults thinking, "Jurassic Park"!

Coming next: Part 1 of EDIT THE BLASTED BOOK!

Thanks for stopping by. Grace

Friday, March 16, 2012

Elizabeth II's Coronation Chicken

A book I was reading this week inspired me to begin a new Blog Series. Tentative title: EDIT THE BLASTED BOOK! A Handbook for Indie Authors. (Nuff said.) Before embarking on that major chore, however, here is the promised Coronation Chicken recipe, which was printed in The Orlando Sentinel, February 1, 2012. According to the article, it was created by Constance Spry, a society florist and author, and chef Rosemary Hume for Queen Elizabeth II's coronation lunch in 1953. If you like your chicken from KFC, you may find this recipe a bit challenging.

Note: This is a cold chicken recipe.

1 chicken (5 pounds), poached
1 tablespoon vegetable oil
1 onion, finely chopped
1 tablespoon each: curry paste, tomato paste
½ cup red wine
1 bay leaf
Juice from ½ lemon
4 canned apricot halves
1¼ cups mayonnaise
½ cup whipping cream
¼ teaspoon salt
Freshly ground pepper
Watercress

Grace note: Before following the instructions below, please note that the chicken is supposed to be poached!

1. Remove the skin from the chicken. Cut meat into small pieces. Broil until golden brown. Allow to cool.

2. Heat oil over medium heat in a saucepan. Add onion; cook until soft and translucent, about 3 minutes. Add curry and tomato pastes, wine, bay leaf and lemon juice. Lower the heat; simmer uncovered until reduced, about 10 minutes. Strain; let sauce cool.

3. Puree apricots through a sieve or with a blender. Place in a bowl; mix in mayonnaise. Add cooled sauce; mix well. Whip cream to stiff peaks; fold into the mixture. Season with salt and pepper to taste. Add more lemon juice if needed.

4. Fold in the broiled chicken pieces, coating them well with the mixture. Garnish with watercress.

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It sounds great, but I can't quite imagine taking the time to do all that. I wonder if baby apricot puree would do . . . Heresy, I know. But if anyone tries it, please let me know.

Coming soon (I hope): the first installment of EDIT THE BLASTED BOOK!

Thanks for stopping by.

Grace, who writes as Blair Bancroft & edits as Best Foot Forward
www.blairbancroft.com - editsbyBFF@aol.com - @blairbancroft

Friday, March 9, 2012

O'Rourke's Heiress

Can the daughter of a jumped-up tradesman find happiness with a handsome and charming viscount, or does her destiny lie elsewhere? Perhaps with a man who isn't trying to kill her?



Because the Dartmoor scene used for the cover of O'Rourke's Heiress was so idyllic, my cover artists sent it to me separately so I could share it.

WARNING! O'Rourke's Heiress contains major spoilers for The Sometime Bride and Tarleton's Wife. I strongly recommend you read both those books before Heiress, which contains characters from each.
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If you've ever wondered what happened to the young men and women who married to suit their parents (as classic fictional heros and heroines never seem to), O'Rourke's Heiress is one example of "What if?" After all, I think most of us would agree we don't always get it right the first time around, and there should be a place in Romance for those who mess up - big time!

Cover blurb for O'Rourke's Heiress:

Although Terence O'Rourke would never admit it, he loves Beth Brockman. Beth, daughter of Tobias Brockman, the Merchant Midas, has loved her foster brother, Terence, for all seventeen years of her life. Both are bastards. Both owe everything to Tobias, who has one simple goal beyond making money: he wants his only child to marry a title.

Beth's protests are ignored as Terence sacrifices his own desires so she can marry the heir to an earldom. But disillusionment begins on Beth's wedding night. She is no longer a pampered princess. Her husband is master of her fate, her money, her person, her life. He can love her, starve her, beat her, sleep with as many women as he likes. He can abandon her . . . even kill her. And live happily ever after on her munificent dowry.

Occasionally, Beth sees flashes of the charming gentleman she thought she married. As a bitter winter on Dartmoor turns to spring, she struggles to make her marriage work. But events begin to suggest her husband is a madman or a murderer. Perhaps both.

Prior to Beth's wedding, Tobias Brockman sent Terence to Louisiana, where he assuages his anguish over Beth's marriage in the arms of an ambitious Creole, who clings to him all the way back to London. Where Terence discovers his "sacrifice" was in vain—his beloved Beth has suffered beatings by her husband, topped by a series of inexplicable accidents. A dash to Dartmoor reveals that the lovely, innocent young girl Terence once knew is totally disillusioned, determined never again to allow love into her life. Terence keeps trying, but their past mistakes continue to haunt them. Happily Ever After seems impossible for this pair of star-crossed lovers, but sometimes Fate does the strangest things . . .

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Next blog: The recipe for Coronation Chicken prepared for a luncheon prior to Queen Elizabeth's coronation way back when.

Thanks for stopping by!